Alright, I feel like giving a really solid critique, and my critiques involve lots of pointing out what's wrong and going into depth. I don't like to give these unrequested, so... request! I think I have a few spare minutes today, and, though I'm plugging away at EMG too, darn it, I can do something /I/ want to do, too. Gimme a link and let me know if you want the critique emailed to you or posted (if at a site that allows comments).
Probably have to limit this to the first five or so requests.